Lucash2's Biotic app

Steam name:Jicken the chiken17
Steam ID:Lucas22341
Age:17
How long have you been roleplaying?:9 months


20 lines of role play examples, using /it and /me. (Eg: /it The windows seem to have stains along the edges and center slowly dripping down. /me takes out a wet towel twisting it and scrube'ing along the glass in a circular motion.)
 
/me Wash's the windows./it A cp comes up. Dvl:"Biotic,There is a blood stain in D6,Need you to go and clean it up."/me Nods and walks to D6./it Hours past,The biotic see's a man with a suit case and blood on his hands. /me Yells for a cp. /it The man starts shooting at the biotic, but the Dvl Tackles the  man before the biotic gets hit. Dvl:"It's fine biotic, go back to work." Dvl Picks the man up and brings him to the nexus slowly, since the man was very heavy looking./me Start's to wash the window again but then see's he doesn't have any water and soap left,He then goes back to the nexus and ask's a cp for more. NOVA:Why don't you ask a CWU?They probably have some soap with them.Zak-Ol: Yes master,Sorry for bothering you.../me Goes to the lady with a white sweater on with, CWU on the front of it. Zak-Ol: Do you have any soap or water Human?CWU: Yeah sure here you go. /it The woman hands a bottle of soap and says,"Try not to run out of it again" /it She chuckles. /me Walks out the store and walks back to the blood stained window. /it 10 minutes past and the biotic goes to see Dvl. Dvl:Biotic, you would like to know why that man a few hours ago had a gun and suit case rightme Nods /it Dvl grins under is mask,sighs and words come out of his mouth. Dvl: A ? /c4 explosive,It was ment to blow one of the watch towers up if you Didn't yell for a cp/it The Dvl Smiles under his mask and say's "Good work maybe later you could have some food in the cafeteria?."/me Smiles and says "Thank you combine overseer!" Saying it very slow. /me Goes to the combine cafeteria and get's some food, since he hasn't eaten for month's,

Character backstory (6 lines at least detailing you character's background. Events, job, family etc and should reflect your skills):
Zak-Ol: I have been with the combine ever since this started,I was in city 18 when this started.I always been with the human's...They are like my family.Sometimes when Zak-Ol Goes asleep he hears things... Sometimes in Zak-Ol's dream's sometimes when he is awake and is near the amputation room...I always said to them " Zak-Ol Is  good for overseer I do everything for the combine and humans!" Some times they beat me... poor humans.... they get beaten more but only when uncivil...Maybe I sometimes am Uncivil.
---IC Information---
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(Names formats should be as followed, example: "Zek'Tul" having a dash in the center)
Name:Zak-Ol
Age:37 [I can't find out old they can be on the wiki]
Skin tone colour:Darkish green
Eye colour:Yellow.
Scars/Marks:Scar's all over his back, and down his eye

Specific skills and specialist, such as medical knowlege, knowlege of technology, philosophy etc?:Technology with Combine equipment.


Did you ever have a problem with your established government in Xen?:No Zak-Ol is good and the human like Zak-Ol like the combine...

What do you plan to do with your biotic character in the future?:I believe that he could soon have his trust to the combine and become a elder Biotic and help them with wounds.

LUCASH: DENIED
○Grammar needs improvement
○Backstory doesn't show anything before the combine control of Earth. He couldn't have been born on earth, and it is a crumpled mess.
○App not posted in right place
○RP examples are confusing and not spaced correctly.
○Work on Vort speak.
○DvL would treat a Vort 100% worse than that
○You would never be allowed to use your powers on anyone.
○You have a different role play time than on your CCA app..?